tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post6628088150203252315..comments2010-05-10T01:08:45.723-07:00Comments on Vision Of Truth: #2: SCENE IN THE KITCHENAsmi's Journalhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13058144417141960287noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post-90524012608875563722009-04-26T13:57:00.000-07:002009-04-26T13:57:00.000-07:00wow! i loved it...keep it up. It's sad too though ...wow! i loved it...keep it up. It's sad too though :( but true. I don't think that devoloping hatred for a character as early as the second chapter is ok but I'm definitely started to dislike oumed! lol :) <br />great story!!Malekat_el7oriyahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05512138531282714547noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post-71469129454149092722009-04-25T10:54:00.000-07:002009-04-25T10:54:00.000-07:00omg thank you for your comment Bengali Muslimah!
...omg thank you for your comment Bengali Muslimah!<br /><br />I'm glad your enjoying it!:)Asmi's Journalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13058144417141960287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post-86777208117273188812009-04-25T10:10:00.000-07:002009-04-25T10:10:00.000-07:00Wow Oumed's personality is pretty clear here. whic...Wow Oumed's personality is pretty clear here. which is what you want to do. I think it's great that you're introducing the characters very well in the first chapters of the story =] <br /><br />keep writing! i'm enjoying it.Brishtihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04127684651928769941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post-28467621521109003452009-04-24T11:57:00.000-07:002009-04-24T11:57:00.000-07:00Thanks Sir Adib, for your comments! :D I am very g...Thanks Sir Adib, for your comments! :D I am very grateful!!1<br /><br />What I really wanted to show in this chapter was Oumed's attitude with his family.<br /><br />The next chapter is about Nur. I'm going to write about Nur and Oumed in separate chapters.<br /><br />Please keep reading, and thanks for motivating me! :)<br /><br />SalamAsmi's Journalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13058144417141960287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post-37773372603300510992009-04-24T08:21:00.000-07:002009-04-24T08:21:00.000-07:00I'd like to add that its a good introduction to wh...I'd like to add that its a good introduction to what his character is with his parents. Keep it up!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16290311167695762085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4032515185462273993.post-15055052656618931342009-04-24T07:02:00.000-07:002009-04-24T07:02:00.000-07:00Its okay I guess. Unless maybe you're brewing up s...Its okay I guess. Unless maybe you're brewing up something shocking that would relate to the incident that just occurred here, then I'll definately be waiting for the next chapter!<br /><br />What I used to learn from my English teachers is that describing with the 5 senses is what makes people feel like they've warped into the scene of the story. Keep writing and I might give you some examples. <br /><br />I've made several stories but they were never finished. My problem was that I wasn't able to put in consistent effort till the end. Perhaps one day I *might* start one. <br /><br />Kudos to thee!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16290311167695762085noreply@blogger.com